Talk:Battle of Yenidje/GA1

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 01:48, 12 April 2020 (UTC)

Nice job on this article. I have a few comments:

• for the first sentence, I suggest "The Battle of Yenidje, also transliterated as Yenice (Greek: Μάχη των Γιαννιτσών), was a major battle between Greek forces under Crown Prince Constantine and Ottoman forces under General Hasan Tahsin Pasha and took place between October 19–20 (O.S.), 1912 during the First Balkan War." and link Old Style and New Style dates for O.S.
• suggest "which was the last line of defense for the city of Thessaloniki, which had a Greek majority population."

 Done

• link Evzones in the lead and at first mention in the body

 Done

• Général de brigade translates as Brigadier General, not Brigadier

 Done

• drop the comma after "Joseph Paul Eydoux"

 Done

• link Formation (military)

 Done

• "Fearing that should"→"This was due to fears that should"

 Done

• suggest piping Serbia, Montenegro, Bulgaria and Albania to the historic entities, not to the current ones

 Done

• suggest Salonica Vilayet (Thrace)
• link Sarantaporo
• move links for 1st and 2nd Divisions to first mention
• "the cavalry brigade, and the 4th and 5th"
• suggest "the Greek general command ordered its troops forward"
• add adj=on to the convert template for "130 meters" to render it as "130-metre"
• Turks→Ottomans

 Done

• suggest "The Greek artillery's shelling was inaccurate since the ground was swampy and unstable. Only a single battery managed to establish itself at a distance of 4.5 kilometres (3 mi) from the Ottoman trenches."

 Done

• "across the Gramos river"

 Done

• "cross the Loudias"

 Done

• "edge of the cityYenidje"

 Done

• "crossing the Axios" and "cross the Loudias"

 Done

• "unable to reach the Axios"

 Done

• "While tThe Ottomans"
• "2two flags lost"

 Done

• "All while, Greek"

 Done

• "bridges across the Axios"

 Done

• "a vexed Eleftherios Venizelos" per MOS:SURNAME

 Done

• "finally crossed the Axios"

 Done

• is Sefik Pasha Süleyman Şefik Pasha?
• "Hasan Tahsin Pasha"

 Done

• "The battle marked the liberationcapture of the city"

 Done

• "transport them to an Asia Minor"

 Done

• Great Powers is duplinked

 Done

• can you add an identifier for The Victorious Greco-Turkish War of 1912-1913?

I've searched a lot but I still cannot find one.--Catlemur (talk) 08:26, 12 April 2020 (UTC)

• File:TiradoresGriegosEnElLagoYeniye--balkancockpitpol00pric 0091.png has questionable licensing. Was this from the book The Balkan Cockpit the Political and Military Story of the Balkan Wars in Macedonia by Walter Harrington Crawfurd-Price? I couldn't find it in the copy available at the source link, but f so, we need the page it is on, but this book was published in 1914 in the UK and would meet {{PD-UK}} and {{PD-US-expired-abroad}}. The current licence doesn't work because there is no information about when Crawfurd-Price died, and no US tag. You could ask Rowanwindwhistler, who is still actively editing.
• With File:Greek infantry Giannitsa 1912.jpg, the source link is broken, the author is unknown (so the current licence doesn't work), and it has no US tag. I also can't find a book on Worldcat that has an ISBN of 960-6845-15-X. You could ask Alexikoua but they haven't edited for a couple of months.

That's my lot, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:57, 12 April 2020 (UTC)