Talk:Your Majesty (album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Reviewing this one shortly after its nomination! --K. Peake 11:01, 17 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good
Remove wikilink on studio album
"of their debut album" → "of their debut studio album,"
"They recorded their next album in" → "They later recorded the album in" since the later date makes it obvious this is about Your Majesty
Target Los Feliz, California to Los Feliz, Los Angeles
Wikilink tempos
"it was compared with" → "comparisons were made to"
"the New Pornographers and the Kinks," → "the New Pornographers, and the Kinks,"
"up to the album's release," → "up to the release of it"
"Your Majesty was promoted with" → "The album was promoted with"
"and two headlining tours." → "and two headlining tours by the band."
Critical reception sentence should open the third para instead of commercial one
"Your Majesty charted on two" → "In the US, the album charted on two"
"charts, peaking at number 15 on the Independent Albums and at number 17 on the Heatseekers Albums." → "charts. It peaked at number 15 and 17 on the Independent Albums and Heatseekers Albums charts, respectively."
"The album received a mixed-to-positive reaction" → "Your Majesty received generally positive reviews"

Background and production

"of independent label" → "of independent record label" with the wikilink
Target acoustic to Acoustic music
Wikilink electric piano
"September and October that year," → "September and October of 2000,"
"They spent the period" → "They spent the period after Christmas"
"February and March 2001." → "February and March of 2001."
"to recording their next album," → "to recording the album,"
"did pre-production with" → "worked on pre-production with"
"they went over" → "the Anniversary went over"
Target Los Feliz, California to Los Feliz, Los Angeles
"and brainstorming sessions." → "and frequent brainstorming."
"in their hometown" → "in their hometown of"
"acted as producer and" → "acted as producer for the album and"
"they were assisted" → "the recording was assisted"
"The band spent some" → "The Anniversary spent some"
Target Malibu Beach to Malibu, California

Composition

Retitle to Composition and lyrics
Do the order of Berwanger and Roelofs need to be mentioned since it is the two same people; why not just mention they wrote all of the tracks?
"the album also includes" → "it also includes"
"been classified as emo" → "been classified as emo,"
"than the band's debut album with" → "than Designing a Nervous Breakdown, with"
Target rock to Rock music
"The New Pornographers, and" → "the New Pornographers, and" per MOS:THEMUSIC
"Pope switched from" → "For the album, Pope switched from"
"upbeat energy of the band's first album." → "upbeat energy of Designing a Nervous Breakdown." with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
Wikilink up-tempo per MOS:LINK2SECT
Target pop to Pop music
"of the Anniversary's debut album." → "of Designing a Nervous Breakdown."
"is love song that is" → "is a love song that is" with the wikilink
"that has an instrumental ending segueing" → "with an instrumental ending that segues"
"playing guitars in" → "playing guitars for the track in"
"are progressive-rock-indebted" → "are progressive rock-indebted"
"with "The Death of the King" evokes the sound" → ""The Death of the King" evokes the sound"
[16][14] should be put in numerical order

Release

Retitle to Release and promotion
"On September 3, the album's track listing" → "On September 3 of that year, the track listing for Your Majesty"
"On September 24," → "Later that month,"
"In October and November 2001, the band" → "In October and November of 2001, the Anniversary"
"in February," → "in the following month,"
"in March and April." → "in March and April of 2002."
"In October and November, they went" → "In October and November of that year, the band went"
"On November 19, Vagrant" → "On November 19, 2002, Vagrant"
"video compilation titled" → "video compilation entitled"
Wikilink music video
Remove wikilink on Rich Egan
"on the label's" → "on the record label's"
Target message board to Internet forum
"followed this up," → "followed the deletion up,"
"said the label and the band" → "said Vagrant and the Anniversary"
"the label had" → "the record label admittedly had"
"replied Vagrant had no" → "replied Vagrant should have had no"
"out-sold the band's debut." → "out-sold Designing a Nervous Breakdown."
"In March and April," → "In March and April of 2003,"
"In October and November," → "In October and November of that year,"
"Carrier and Apollo Sunshine supported the second." → "the second was supported by Carrier and Apollo Sunshine."
"the band broke up." → "the Anniversary broke up."

Reception

"received generally favorable reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
The reviews should start in a second para after the Metacritic sentence
"Steve Servos said;" → "Steve Servos said,"
"to those on the band's debut album." → "to the ones on Designing a Nervous Breakdown."
"E! Online said the release" → "The staff of E! Online said Your Majesty"
"that Berwanger's and Pope's vocals keep the record" → "opining that Berwanger's and Pope's vocals keep the album"
"keyboard from the band's debut," → "keyboard from Designing a Nervous Breakdown,"
"and that the tracks are" → "and the tracks are"
"said Rob Schnapf's and Doug Boehm's work" → "said Schnapf's and Boehm's work"
"Berwanger and Roelofs." → "Berwanger and Roelofs on the album."
"found the band lacking in" → "found the Anniversary to be lacking in"
"but it failed to do so" → "but had failed to do so"
"Your Majesty reached number 15" → "Commercially, Your Majesty reached number 15"

Track listing

Top should mention all songs were written by Justin Roelofs and Josh Berwanger, since they do not need to be ordered differently each time

Personnel

Target Justin Roelofs to White Flight (band)

Charts

Good

References

Copyvio score looks very good at 18.0%
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 21 and 35
Cite Billboard as magazine for refs 38 and 39, though only target to Billboard (magazine) on ref 38

Final comments and verdict

On hold and I have noticed your skills as an editor have improved since when I started doing reviews of your articles a while back, well done! --K. Peake 11:30, 18 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Yeepsi (talk) 11:51, 18 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Yeepsi Quick response was nice to see, though there were a few remaining issues that I fixed with brief copyediting. ✓ Pass now, as is well deserved! --K. Peake 12:21, 18 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]