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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 22:51, 12 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi IndianBio, it's been two weeks. Any news? Cheers, --Bleff (talk) 22:54, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]
No I am aware of this and will pick it up this week. —IB [ Poke ] 08:43, 6 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Infobox and lead
  • Add alternate text.
Fixed. I'm sorry I'm finding out just now you started reviewing!
  • Try replacing the cover art with a .png version as is the norm.
Fixed
  • So no actual release date?
Couldn't find one
  • and John Cale's musical arrangements --> and producer John Cale's musical arrangements
Fixed
  • thus also drastically changing the looks that had initially made her a famous fashion model. --> thus also drastically changing the looks that had initially made her famous as a fashion model. --> also link model.
Fixed
  • Nico's unprecedented sound and personal style are considered an influence on several artists --> This needs a little bit detail for the lead, as to how the sound was unprecendented and what was her personal style.
Fixed. Is it still too vague? --Bleff (talk) 22:44, 30 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Hi, IndianBio. I hope not to be annoying. How is the review going?--Bleff (talk) 12:57, 18 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
No you are not being annoying, I'm the one horribly delaying the review :( I'm so sorry. I will continue. —IB [ Poke ] 13:03, 18 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Background
  • However, the Velvet Underground was unimpressed with Nico's ability and reluctant to include her --> However, the Velvet Underground was unimpressed with Nico's ability and were reluctant to include her
Fixed
  • I really love this whole section but I think the recording part can be made into a separate section. There is ample amount of material for the background info and the recording. And I really like how it flows chronologically.
Fixed, although I was unsure about where to make the division.
  • He gave her a budget of $10,000 --> Lets use the inflation template about how the payment would have changed in current bottom dollar.
Fixed
  • Cale later said that during the recording of her solo albums, "she was really in pain --> We can simplify it as "During the sessions, Nico and Cale "fought at every oportunity" with the singer "being in pain" while recording the album.
Fixed
Composition
  • The quote box, can you mention what Nico is exactly talking about?
I wrote "Nico discussing her distinctive songwriting during this period"
  • Again I think the composition section is actually more describing the themes and influences of the songs, and then the songs section talks about the main composition
I thought of the Composition section giving an overview of the album's sonority, its influences and lyricism. While the songs' section going specifically track by track. I removed the subdivision, though. Is it better like this?
Critical reception
  • WE list the reviews which has an exact score attached to it in the template. Please remove Lester and Trouser Press from it as thats interpretation of the review.
Fixed
  • I really am amazed at this section and have taken pointers regarding my editing of critical response sections.
I am very humbled. Thank you!

I have given the album a thorough read and I find it to be quite flawless. After you address them, I will do a source and spotchecks review. —IB [ Poke ] 12:58, 1 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ok IndianBio, I believe I adressed all the flaws you pointed out up to now. Thank you very much for the positive feedback! Bleff (talk) 20:03, 1 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
One minor thing, in the Accolades table, can you apply WP:ACCESS parameters for the first column? —IB [ Poke ] 09:37, 7 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Oh, I'm so ignorant at stuff like this. I rewrote the columns with the parameter ! scope="col" |. Is that what you meant?--Bleff (talk) 16:50, 11 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Media usage

Just the last thing as detailed above and then we are good to go. —IB [ Poke ] 09:37, 7 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Bleff: I have gone ahead and done the changes myself with this edit. Congratulations coz the article is finally GA. Thanks for your immense patience and hope you take it through FA also. —IB [ Poke ] 15:18, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you! :) --Bleff (talk) 17:34, 16 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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