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GA Review

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Good job with this. It shouldn't take long to take care of my suggestions...

From Intro: Can you mention in here that Michelle Pfeiffer was the guest star, and maybe a mention about how acclaimed her performance was.

From Plot:

  • "...the more Homer begins to fear that there may be more fusion at the hotel than back at the plant." This appears to be a pun and, not to be a stick in the mud, isn't very encyclopedic. Could you reword it?
  • Can you mention in this section that Marge is sick at and unattractive at home? It's a significant factor in the story.

From Production:

  • I think the amount of single words in "quotes" was a bit overdone in this section. Some of them are appropriate, but others can just as easily be dropped. I took the liberty of dropping a few, so if you could just check and make sure you're OK with the changes, let me know.

Note: I made some grammatical changes in the article, mostly minor stuff, but please take a look. Also, for future reference, this might be a style thing, but avoid using the word "that" so often. 90% of the time, you can just as easily drop the word and the meaning of the sentence remains the same. Take a look at the sentences where I removed the word.

Very nice job! --Hunter Kahn (talk) 02:00, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! I think I have addressed all of your concerns. :) TheLeftorium 10:21, 16 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]
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