Talk:Danganronpa: Trigger Happy Havoc/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 17:33, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

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Prose

Lede

battle royale - link? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:48, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
gives the sixteen students - gives 16 students Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:48, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
appearing in the story - redundant Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:48, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
murder another student and remain undiscovered. The game combines elements from dating sims and third-person shooters as Makoto can interact with the other students and solve class trials by shooting a "Truth Bullet" when finding inaccurate arguments during the cases. - perhaps combine to say "muder another student and not be voted as the killer in a trial. Combining elements from dating simulations and third-person shooters, Makoto interacts with other students to solve "class trials" by shooting at arguments displayed on screen." Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:48, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
the "Stylish High Speed Reasoning Action" system - I don't think we need this name in the lede. Perhaps just "unique gameplay system". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:48, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Rebvised
easy difficulty on solving class trials and its mini games - "easy difficulty" is probably enough. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:48, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Reworded
Two manga adaptations, two spin-off novels, an anime television adaptation by Lerche, and a stage adaptation of the game have also been produced. - "the game produced several adaptions and spin-offs: an anime television series, a stage show, two mangas and two novels." or similar. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:48, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done

General

An example of gameplay in Danganronpa gameplay. - additional word here not required. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Danganronpa: Trigger Happy Havoc casts players in the role of Makoto Naegi, a student of Hope's Peak Academy, who finds himself trapped in a game of mutual killing among his peers. The gameplay is stylistically similar to the Ace Attorney series by being centered around investigation and finding contradictions, albeit with an emphasis on faster gameplay - I feel like saying "murder mystery" here somewhere would be suitable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
Gameplay - quite a lack of wikilinks here. Things like Playstation 4, etc, should be linked in body as well as lede. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
The Class Trials are the main section of the game, in which the students discuss amongst themselves who the culprit is. - "main section"^{[according to whom?]} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Revised.
Is there no other images we could use here? No one who worked on the development, etc Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Sadly Kodaka or the director have no free images. I added Ogata since she does Makoto's voice and her performance gathered Kodaka's attention. Also, added the English actress for Toko/Jack since the localization mentions it was difficult to find them.
- Reworded
In this "What If?" mode - probably just can say "alternative". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
First usage of words should be linked in body. See Spike. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done.
Link some jargony words, see "demo", "graphics" etc. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
IIRC, review sections shouldn't contain the scores if they also exist in the reception table. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. Added reviewers with the exception of Play who for some reason didn't give his name. Also removed some like Famitsu who only throw scores.
When talking about reviews, please credit the author, rather than just the publication. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
We actually mention "the Anime" a few times, but don't actually link to Danganronpa: The Animation. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 13:08, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Done.

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:33, 24 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Lee Vilenski: Thanks for the review.Tintor2 (talk) 18:52, 27 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No problem. I'll give it another read and see if there is anything else, and pass/hold/whatever. Great work on the article, btw. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 09:50, 28 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]