Template:Did you know nominations/Sing Rattanasamai

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The result was: promoted by Panyd^{The muffin is not subtle} 16:39, 10 May 2015 (UTC)

Sing Rattanasamai

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~~... that General Sing Rattanasamai began his military career as a French colonial policeman?~~

ALT1:... that General Sing Rattanasamai began his military career as a noncommissioned officer in the French colonial police force?
ALT2:... that General Sing Rattanasamai began his military career as a noncommissioned officer in the Garde Indigene?
ALT3: ... that Laotian General Sing Rattanasamai was originally a policeman in the Garde Indigene?
Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Adam Yacenda

Created by Georgejdorner (talk). Self nominated at 02:29, 28 March 2015 (UTC).

New enough, long enough, neutrally written, no close paraphrasing seen in online sources. I added URL links for some of the books that are online to verify the information. I have a question about whether Sing is his given name or surname; that should be clarified in the DEFAULTSORT line and perhaps added to the top of the page. QPQ done. The hooks aren't so hooky, because readers won't know who Sing Rattanasamai is and probably won't care unless you grab their attention with something interesting. Yoninah (talk) 22:10, 3 May 2015 (UTC)

Some other editor familiar with DEFAULTSORT added that attraction. I must admit that name order in Laos is problematic, so far as my sources go. General Oriental custom is family name first, personal name after. However, even though my sources refer to him as "General Sing", the elite families of Laos are commonly referred to by their second name. It is uncertain if the Rattanasamais are such a family. (See https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sananikone_family for an example of this naming practice.)
As for the hooks...well, he's not too exciting a guy. ALT2 is probably as lively a hook as can be found. I am going to strike the others and add one more.Georgejdorner (talk) 18:24, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

OK, ALT3 looks better to me. Could you provide an inline cite at the end of the second sentence under "Early life and colonial service" for DYK? Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 19:47, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Thank you, everything looks good. Offline hook ref AGF and cited inline. Either ALT2 or ALT3 is good to go (I prefer ALT3). Yoninah (talk) 21:24, 7 May 2015 (UTC)