Talk:Golem Arcana/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 13:36, 8 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be happy to review this JAGUAR 13:36, 8 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Initial comments

"with some seeing it as a boon and others as a detriment" - a 'boon'?
"and as rewards for optional missions encountered through the app" - for completing optional missions might sound clearer
" Another type of card, relics, allow players" - maybe Another type of card, known as relics
"The golems, cards, and game board are covered in tiny magnetic dots" - 'tiny' sounds unencyclopaedic. How about small?
"Backers could get the base game with a pledge of $55" - why pledge? Does this mean if they donated 55 dollars they would receive the game?
"Yahoo Tech called it "hefty"" - stylised as 'Yahoo! Tech' (without the italics)
No dead links

It's a nice article and I like the idea of this innovation! Once all of the above are clarified this this should pass. JAGUAR 15:10, 8 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Jaguar: Thank you for the review. I've made all of the suggested changes except for changing the word boon. I'm not sure if you're asking what it is (in which case, it's "something to be thankful for; blessing; benefit"), or if you're asking for me to change it. If it's the latter, please pick a word you like better and either swap it out yourself or let me know, and I'd be happy to do so. The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 23:21, 8 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing them quickly! 'Boon' isn't something I come across a lot, but anyway this article meets the GA criteria. Well done

JAGUAR 12:47, 9 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 15:02, 9 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]