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Estádio do Maracanã

I'm looking for comments on what kind of information could be added to make the article more complete. (Suggest section headers?) Comments regarding bad grammar are also welcome. How far off GA is the article? Thank you for your time! -GilbertoSilvaFan 15:48, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Michaelas10

Well it certainly has a lot of GA potential. Could use copyediting and less point of view. Comments:

Sole years and decade shouldn't be linked per WP:DATE.
...commonly called Estádio do Maracanã - Change to ...also called.
Notes should be separated from the references to avoid confusion.
On March 21, 1954 a new official attendance record was set in the game between Brazil and Paraguay match, as 183,513 spectators entered the stadium with a ticket - Add a comma after the date, "as" > "after", remove "match" as redundant to "game".
...three big football clubs in Rio: Botafogo, Flamengo and Fluminese - Replace colon with m-dash.
...a much loved Brazilian sports figure - Remove "a much loved" per WP:NPOV.
...the stadium after him, to Estádio Jornalista Mário Filho - Remove the comma.
Put the "Construction", "Opening", "Post World Cup years", and "Modern day" as subsections to the main "History" section.
References should be properly formatted using the cite templates.
...leading to the death of three supporters, and 50 more being injured - Remove the comma.
Corinthians won the game on penalties - ...,which resulted in the Corinthians winning the game on penalties.
On June 16, 1950, the opening match of the stadium took place - Move the date to the end of the sentence.
...was still by no means finished - ...was still unfinished.
...FIFA were happy for matches to be played - ...FIFA allowed matches to be played.
The official attendance of the game was 173,830, however, the actual attendance was estimated to be closer to 210,000 - The two parts of the sentence aren't opposed to each other. Reword to The official attendance of the game was 173,830, with the actual attendance estimated to be about 210,000.
However, the widely used nickname of Maracanã continued to be used - Remove "widely used" as redundant.
Brazil beat Mexico 4-0, Ademir becoming the first scorer of a competitive goal at the stadium with his strike in the 30th minute - Brazil beat Mexico with a final score 4-0, with Ademir becoming the first scorer of a competitive goal at the stadium with his 30th minute strike. Michaelas10 ^{Respect my authoritah} 16:10, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Thanks Michaelas, much appreciated! -GilbertoSilvaFan 18:41, 23 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Oldelpaso

A promising start, but to reach GA, the article needs to be more comprehensive and better referenced. For ideas, there are two featured and two GA articles about stadiums: City of Manchester Stadium, Dr Pepper Ballpark, Arsenal Stadium and Gaylord Family Oklahoma Memorial Stadium.

A section about the structure and design of the stadium would be useful i.e that the stadium is a continuous oval bowl etc. What is the section which juts out in the lower half of Image:Maracana Stadium.jpg? There appears to be some form of track in the stadium, what is it used for?
How often is the stadium used for club matches?
Things which need citations:
- Pele's records
- Change of name to Estádio Jornalista Mário Filho
- Completion of construction being 17 years late
- Barrassi being sent to assist
- Reopening with 97,000 capacity

Hope this helps. Oldelpaso 10:23, 31 March 2007 (UTC)[reply]