Talk:Isko Moreno/GA1
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Reviewer: Larry Hockett (talk · contribs) 23:30, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
I will be happy to review this entry. Larry Hockett (Talk) 23:30, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
Unfortunately, even at a quick glance, there are a number of problems that will require significant attention before promotion to GA status. This makes it inappropriate to continue with a detailed review right now.
The writing is quite rough in some sections. It appears that thorough proofreading was not carried out before nomination. Examples (just from the first few paragraphs) include:
- "screen name Isko Moreno or Yorme" - Is Yorme also a screen name or just a nickname? Source?
- "who currently serves as the 22nd mayor of Manila since 2019." --> has served?
- "he served as a former three-term councilor" --> as a three-term councilor
- "mature roles" - unclear if we are discussing his maturity as an actor or the fact that they were adult films
- "He appeared in Siya'y Nagdadalaga, and has appeared in movies such as Exploitation, Mga Babae sa Isla Azul and Misteryosa." - What is Siya'y Nagdadalaga? If it is a movie, the sentence can be simplified.
In general, the sourcing needs work. One passage is marked with a Citation needed tag, and other passages lack sourcing. There is also some use of user-generated sources such as IMDb. The electoral history charts are only partially sourced (and they appear to be incomplete). The sentence starting with "Likewise, for the past 100 days..." comes from this 2019 source and doesn't make sense in the context of this entry.
The lead will need to be expanded to provide a better summary of the body of the article.
The entry could use more details in some areas. For example, where did he attend high school?
The Rappler source is wishy-washy as to whether Moreno was actually arrested. It would be nice to find other sources that describe updates in the case. The first sentence in the arrest paragraph is too long.
Minor point: I don't think we need a link to the Manila mayor's page. It is just an excerpt from this entry.
This article was nominated under the Law category, but it seems to be a better fit under Politics and government. Moreno was once a law student but never a lawyer.
To sum up, this nomination is a quick fail because it is quite far from meeting the GA criteria related to well-written material and referencing. I think it would be most helpful to focus on these areas (a WP:GOCE request may be especially helpful) before proceeding with another GA nomination. Larry Hockett (Talk) 00:16, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
