Wikipedia:Peer review/Panta bhat/archive1
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I've listed this article for peer review because… I believe, with a little push it can become a GA alright. 
Thanks, Aditya(talk • contribs) 17:30, 19 April 2015 (UTC)
Comments from MJ94
[edit]- In the lede, I suggest rewriting the last sentence. Based on what you have already wrote, the reader already knows that panta bhat is a dish of rice, so it is not necessary to refer to it as a dish of leftover rice. Also, if you were to keep it as it currently reads, the comma after "spoiling" is not needed unless there was also a comma after "rice."
- The Etymology section, while interesting, needs to be rewritten a bit. When I read it aloud, I was a bit confused about what jalao chasani is. Is this a phrase that can be linked to another article? The same goes for "sweetmeats". Also in the Etymology section, can you please define what "Both" refers to? Which names? "And" should not start a sentence; since what comes after the "and" is related to the previous sentence, consider connecting the thoughts in one sentence.
- In the History section, "in the Mughal Era" could be "During the Mughal Era". "Circa 17th century" is not needed.
- Your Preparation section looks very nice content-wise. It would probably be a good idea to check punctuation and grammar in this section as I have noticed several instances of improper comma usage.
- In Health effects, "According to a study" is not needed. However, the study should be cited at the end of the claim.
@Aditya Kabir: I hope these comments have helped you. Overall, be careful of grammar and punctuation. I would also like to point out that your references look very nice. If you have any questions, comments, or concerns, please post them here or at my talk page and I will get back to you as soon as I am able. MJ94 (talk) 19:35, 27 April 2015 (UTC)
- All done. Aditya(talk • contribs) 20:56, 29 April 2015 (UTC)
